[1313] Lucifer's Tears

Hi all, This is an excerpt from my current project. It's from chapter 26, so it's pretty late in the story. I know it's not perfect and probably needs a lot of work. So, all feedback is welcome.

TW: Drugs. Cocaine, specifically.

My work: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1sWTICv5Yij0h4QwDS8I5mJXVrtMcdxTHhhnax7FKpjc/edit?usp=sharing

Critiques: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1sWTICv5Yij0h4QwDS8I5mJXVrtMcdxTHhhnax7FKpjc/edit?usp=sharing

https://old.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1i4ky43/317_on_corentyn/m91id59/