[902] Canine

Hello everyone! This piece is the opening scene of a novella I'm working on. This means that it raises some questions that aren't answered yet (e.g., what's up with her teeth), but I don't think it should matter too much.

The main things I want to know are:

• Is it interesting? Would you keep reading?
• Is the voice strong?
• Is it overwritten?

Link to my piece here.

My critique is here (split across two comments).

Thank you!