[1770] The Book in Seat 22A

I posted this chapter a week ago, but now have made substantial edits too it. Please let me know your thoughts. This first chapter I feel at the moment is a slog to get through so any (kind) suggestions and specific improvements I can make are helpful. Also this is Literary fiction.

My work: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1xzMvBy7JZPzYJJ21OF4wS4soE11k8lYvlLMcpFaHJZc/edit?usp=sharing

Critique (Mods this is a new critique)

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