[1080] Mistakes and Other Things Like It

Hello.

Been a while since I have written or posted but happy to be back. This is the first chapter of a story I don't feel like I'll finish but I am experimenting with the writing style. I'm looking for any and all feedback based on the style, tone and readability. Here is the story:

Mistakes and Other Things Like It

Here is my crit:

[1319] The Princess's Choice

Thanks.