[869] Untitled Sci-fi Thriller

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This is the first chapter in the sci-fi thriller I’m about 60k words into. For context, this takes place on an earth-like planet in a fictional solar system. 

I especially want to know if it’s captivating. If you picked this book up and read the first chapter, would you be compelled to read on? I appreciate any and all advice!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1a_7gS-KBdhB-a0MBS_7p_ez_1iDxFenWW9ZaKVn9cbg/edit?pli=1&tab=t.0