[1567] Exit Signs

(Not really NSFW, just some implied tension, no graphic descriptions)

Hi, here is a recent attempt at a short story. I am mostly working on setting up tension / revealing character motivation through dialogue. I like to work in short, sensory details with fewer descriptions of interiority, so please keep that in mind as you critique my work. I am mostly hoping for feedback about the dynamic between the two characters and if it feel believable! Thanks!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1yQhMsFAAjbibsDXZ3-6g6N-YN0kZuLl-206aMOLIjSo/edit?tab=t.0

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