[2623] Douglas, Chapter 1

This is the first chapter of a short novel I am working on. It's about a troubled search and rescue diver. This chapter introduces the character, his environment and background. However it does not setup the initial situation that will drive the story (he will soon discover a body and be pulled into a crime mystery).

I would love any and all feedback, and would specifically like to know:

- Does this setup make you want to keep reading?

- Are the constant observations and back story confusing or annoying to follow? I am trying to build a rich character and setting, but have to stop myself from going off the rails very often.

Thanks for reading!

Doc: Chapter 1

Crits:

1372

525

2003