[1631] Lovers' Descent Chapter 1 (reposted with heavy edits)

This is the result of a lot of great feedback and some intense editing, as well as a lot more added content for depth and clarity.

I've enjoyed writing for a long time, but I only recently started writing something much bigger. Currently, I'm almost 20,000 words deep and having a blast. I don't plan on trying to get this published or anything, I just want to know how my writing holds up to scrutiny.

This story is something of a dark romantic thriller with two perspectives, and will revolve around a couple's individual descents into madness as serial killers, with the main character introduced in this chapter in particular learning to accept her newfound urges, perhaps at the cost of her other personal relationships. Edgy, I know lol.

The first chapter is supposed to serve as something of a cold open hook, with a lot more exposition and introduction+development of characters and settings in the following chapters. The main characters next kills have significantly more set up with more interesting victims.

Please let me know if you would consider reading further based on this first chapter! And especially let me know if any ideas or details are unclear.

Link to the first chapter: https://docs.google.com/document/u/2/d/e/2PACX-1vQ1nJQnS7xgm4rNj1jQooTfjyZFsORg1q7QYZLkNgjHFbRqhvaW_4bq5pzhBIV0ilbn9BvyzkYMzPG2/pub

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