[831] Damon's Deal

I've been envisioning writing something where I explore a dynamic between a (seemingly) evil and immensely powerful nonhuman entity and a regular person.

Just tell me what you think, and if you liked it. I'm especially interested in thoughts on: dialogue, worldbuilding, mystery.

Story:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1CMMQnDtn_vTjRZ5YO8SNVxl34uyLUNwqdRz9vVbq_7k/edit?usp=sharing

Crit:

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1q9ekzu/1017_veins_of_sarr/