[2262] Entopsy - Chapter 1

Entopsy: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1koF2JgQ6GnoHsPytfkSqxH9IOEV6IQmBM7DjnRjDL-0/edit?usp=sharing

I worked through this chapter trying to add clarity to the dialogue and reverse speech/scenes. Trying to get an idea of this would work for the full novel, or if I should move on to another story.

Critiques:
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