[POEM] looking for your feeling, no advice on my writing style except if there are language faults (English is not my first language) thx for reading <3

The Sun came in tapping,

Tapping at the window, gently unwrapping

My dreams and I from the bed sheets

He took my heart and lift it from the soft warmth of the pillow,

He took a knife and stuck it into the innocence of my eyes closed.

This is what happens when Sun comes around and wakes us,

Now feel the pain and joyful madness with which he comes and tells us:

'Come on my daughter now is the time to wake up'

This is why I hate the Sun.

How about gentleness

How about softness

How about the sweet kiss of moonlight on my cheeks as I awake?

How about the gracious, sing of the owl waking me from my own madness?

In midnight in my dark chamber I awaken through the dark's nest

And find at my window the gracious goddess

Who's looked upon me overnight.

And there she is still watching me and my dreams unravel through night's time.

'you may stay in bed, sister, or the devil's eye will find you, but if somehow you choose to wake up, I will protect you.'

Oh how I love this sound:

This sweet kindness,

This care she brings to me.

How about she comes in the morning, and the Sun perishes and dies?

Is that too audacious of a wish, will I be harmed for this?

Thx for reading <3
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