[2103] Skinner Box Blues

Skinner Box Blues [2103]

Content warning: Drug abuse, addiction

This is the first scene of a sci-fi story I'm writing about the "perfect" drug and what it might take to quit it. The subject matter is pretty serious, so I tried to balance it with some dark humor. I'm aware that I tend to overwrite sometimes, so let me know if the style doesn't work for you. I'm also curious if people think the whole "inner voice" thing is too gimmicky.

Would you be interested in reading more? If not, was it the subject matter or something else that put you off it? Any feedback is appreciated!

My critique: [2262] Entopsy