Heavenly, heavenly.

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Heavenly, heavenly

you are.

Our kiss by the fountain,

perfectly heavenly.

Water wetting my lips,

water wetting yours,

water flowing

through our kiss.

Heavenly, heavenly

you are.

You said you had

big things to do,

so I waited,

I waited,

dreaming how

heavenly, heavenly

you are.

I made my choices,

turned my life around.

Now I walk a crowded city,

a cramped home.

How I longed,

my love!

And there you are,

by that fountain—

ethereal,

perfectly heavenly.

Waiting.

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