[1433]Pepperpops

This is an opening for scifi mystery novel set on a Mars colony. It's already the second book and I'd like to know if it would word as standalone as well. Meaning: Is it too confusing? Are there too difficult concepts? Ah, well you know best how to destroy a writing. Enjoy giving it a shot! My crits: https://old.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1rul6kp/2000_first_part_of_chapter_one_untitled/oay54u3/ https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1roj1c0/comment/oax7dx7/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web3x&utm_name=web3xcss&utm_term=1&utm_content=share_button https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1rcvvij/comment/oawyf2z/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web3x&utm_name=web3xcss&utm_term=1&utm_content=share_button

Pepperpops for you: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1fnBI57VkmU69KU5E1_ryd4x-DXxwdleZWaFVdMFaGlI/edit?usp=sharing