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This is the beginning of a novella or novel I'm trying to get up to snuff to submit to a contest. It's about a couple living under an authoritarian regime in the near-future real world.

Anything goes but I'm mostly interested in feedback on my prose and flow. Totally open for any line edits as gdoc comments. I mainly write in Scriv so don't worry about formatting stuff, it's probably from exporting it.

Anyways, thanks for any and all feedback!

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