[815] "Carrion." Flash fiction.

Crit: Inventory Error.

I know this story needs quite a bit of work, I'm just stumped as to how to go about it. Questions:

1. Does the theme feel consistent? Do the various threads of narrative come together in a coherent way?
2. Should I flesh out the characters more?
3. How's the pacing? My IRL writing group's main feedback was regarding the pacing of the ending--they said it felt too sudden. If it is too sudden, which elements should be expanded upon?

Carrion.