Is this correct? Verifying a lyric

Hi, apologies if this isn’t the proper place to put this, but I have written a verse for a contest I am entering which contains a limited amount of Japanese, I am not confident in my abilities beyond basic words or phrases yet since I am early into my studies, but I am looking for a second opinion to make 100% sure I haven’t left any errors

I use the phrase “こんばんは” which to my understanding means “good evening”

I also use the sentence “はしご酒, 二丁目から堂山” to reference bar hopping and two notably LGBTQ friendly districts (ni-chome & doyama), I’m more concerned about this sentence since it’s more complex than what I’m used to, I want to make sure im using から correctly, and especially im not certain if “はしご酒” is the proper term for bar hopping/pub crawling

Thank you for your time, it’s greatly appreciated