[1484] Invoker

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Invoker - Chapter 1

Hi everyone, first time trying this. This is the first third of chapter 1 of a literary fantasy novel. I have tried to weave philosophy and the character's worldview into a lot of their ruminations.

I have two main concerns.

1. Is this just all a little too much? Should I have a lighter touch? I really enjoy writing these more philosophical passages but I worry its too on the nose.

2. I struggle a bit with character movement/action. I feel like I can do interiority reasonably well, but my physical descriptions and action can be a little bland and weak. Or maybe its okay for those things to be less over the top?

Any and all criticism is very welcome, thank you for taking the time to read!