[2035 words] Untitled Cyberpunk Chapter 1 (Part 2)

This is part 2 of chapter 1, which I submitted earlier, and would love some more feedback on the dialogue and the characters. Primarily Angelo, and to an extent Kiara. (This is Angelo's introduction chapter).

Also, are the action sequences clear enough for you? I received a fair bit of feedback on part 1, which I already thought was my weakest area, hopefully I've made some improvements since.

For context, we've just met Angelo, who's ambushed a convoy with a team of Mercs. Kiara, the leader of the Mercs clearly does not trust Angelo. They successfully ambush the convoy and are now attempting to drive the cargo back to a safehouse, which is where part 2 kicks off.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTJkTsuYxL3L6jKOEcRGFoMFg2hWD3_sU_n0jT1ZV7UYC238eP99SCG1kzsMfy0qG7O4BYTkROZP-2y/pub

Critques:

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1v6xxld/comment/p0h5u2q/?context=3

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1vcljwz/comment/p15qwyz/?context=3

For those that are interested, or want full context for chapter 1, here is my original part 1 post which now includes some improvements from the feedback I received.

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1umi1g5/2134_words_untitled_cyberpunk_part_1/

I would love feedback on the chapter as a whole, there are some full circle moments in this chapter alone that would only make sense with full context, that being said, feedback on part 2 alone is still greatly appreciated.