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RobinGayle

Necromancer

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Fearless, as most youth can be

I abased my dose of purity

Spent all of my days trying to conquer the night

With reckless curiosity,

I courted Death with intensity

And shunned all chaperones save Pure Delight.

I did not heed the mourning dove

Or the consequence of requited love

Convinced that I was somehow born invincible

I committed the worst of crimes

Social suicide so many times

That even my ghost has now become invisible

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/3cvd1f/say_nothing_to_hell/

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/3cmk41/atropa_belladonna/

Posted Jul 13, 2015, 9:37 PM UTC · edited

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jealous1stillnv•

In the start the rhyme feels a little forced but till the end it rhymes perfectly . Great idea well done

Keep rhyming live long and prosper

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telket•

I really, really dug this. There were a couple of lines I thought were very clever, especially the line "Spent all of my days trying to conquer the night". The whole thing had a very specific tone and was a great idea overall.

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raspbewwies•

I loved this. I think it's really easy to relate to, the hedonism and carelessness of youth. The rhythm is easy going too.

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