[Review Video] Gameplay compiled video. How can I improve?

Hey! So i created this video but it seems that not a lot of people are watching and I think that the video is not entertaining enough... I tryied making the video as small as possible so that people would watch it unitl the end. Here is the video : https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sFCELuSIfb8 Reviews: https://www.reddit.com/r/youtubers/comments/3kl1zh/review_video_how_can_i_improve/cuz8iea

https://www.reddit.com/r/youtubers/comments/3kjnfa/review_video_really_funny_gameplay_video_honest/cuz8w5v

How can I improve it?