[Review Video] A Short Crafts Video. I would appreciate your comments!

I've been uploading some DIY videos. My target audience is teens,and the early twenties. I would really appreciate your honest review on this latest video.

My Latest Video
https://youtu.be/C6zB6yRZJ_Q

The Comments I Wrote https://www.reddit.com/r/youtubers/comments/3ksqy8/review_video_cornwall_holiday_vlog_part_1/ https://www.reddit.com/r/youtubers/comments/3kcdx3/review_video_vlog_i_dress_up_as_a_cat/

A Brief Self-Review After reading comments from my last post, I tried to adjust audio level a bit, but it doesn't seem to be good enough. I think the intro is a bit messy, and I look a bit nervous when my face was being filmed on camera.