yellow as honey

yellow as honey the dynamism of death

as the sight is dripping away

as all our skins wear out

death-awareness they mop up from the air

enriches our urban monks

into nobler and nobler

for them, every path belongs to one

passing knits us together

in absence we swim towards each other

I'm washed up onto you

to get drowned in your breath

(This is a translation from my native, I never wrote anything straight in english.)

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