I like the third line in particular, using a positive word to describe a negative, rough image. It took me by surprise and made me reread it. 
I also like the image from lines 6-8, lips holding the past like rings on a tree. 
The last two lines interest me but I haven't worked out what it means yet! 

The sense of longing comes across really well in this. I dig it.

I'd say maybe remove lips from the 3rd line? I feel like "nicotine lips, as fine as sand" flows a little bit better. On the other hand, I LOVE the repeating in line 7. Rad overall.

I liked the repetition throughout the poem, as it reminded me of a craving or longing one would feel for a lover or cigarette. Keep it up!

Black tar

Nicotine lips

Lips as fine as sand.

I long to kiss

Lips like mine

I long to feel

With my thumb, with my thumb

With my own bare hands, the history;

Or just a pair of lips to rub against

Whenever the moon turns blue




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Nicotine Lips