I love this. The rhythm and pacing are perfect and the verses click really satisfyingly without needing to force in a rhyme at the end of every line. But when it rhymes, it rhymes with finesse. 
You paint vivid images with few words and the symbolism is just as strong as the layout of the poem. This could be the lyrics of a really great track. I'm a sucker for metalcore but any genre would work, really. ;)
Amazingly well done, I'd tip my hat if I had one. 

I like this, but I'm wondering if a ballad is really the best form to tackle this topic.  Ballads are typically sing-songy or folksy in delivery and in the topics they depict, whereas this piece's topic is trying to hold a failing relationship together.  It's a pretty emotional and serious subject matter that, when put into balladic form, comes off as light-hearted and insincere (at least a little bit: it's not particularly flagrant).  I think this would have a more fitting atmosphere if it were written in blank verse.  It would carry a greater gravity while still being elegant and rolling.

The poem is fine as-is though.  Good job.

Seriously got to me, I can feel your emotions through your words 

Between our hands a ticking bomb;  
while neither dared let go.  
Devotion's price demands our lives,  
now watch me save us both.  

Find reminders on the shelf  
and burn them all away.  
Hateful loathings for the self  
have burrowed here to stay  

Frozen daggers shaped like pleas  
that i must grin and bear.  
Must forget your heartfelt smiles-  
my fingers in your hair  
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*It's not goodbye, it's I can't do this*  
*you and i- we must get through this*  
&amp;nbsp; 

You and I where once was we,  
I miss you so much, can't you see.  
I can't hold on and watch us die;  
I'll save us both... I have to try  

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Save Us (Cathartic Ramblings of a Broken Heart)