I love the pace of this. It almost makes me imagine a horse galloping as I read. If I may make one (very small) constructive criticism, though? I would take the commas out. The pause that a comma implies distracts from the quickening that I get from this. That's just one man's humble opinion, however, Fine work, mo chara. 

I enjoyed this and felt as if I was there.

Really love the image of the puppy with the shoe as a way to describe a kind of bliss full ignorance. A very condensed and powerful simile. Nice work.

thanks for the feedback. regarding "sire", I thought it meant "bridle" or "mount" but apparently I totally made that up. Thanks for pointing that out. Regarding the puppy/rope/stick/you idea, I meant to convey that I am like a puppy whose attention bounces from thing to thing.

Cute little poem! I have a bit of trouble trying to fully understand the puppy simile. A puppy with a shoe... naivete attempting to understand  the relationship? A rope, a stick and you... I imagine the rope pulling the puppy, and maybe the stick as some sort of guidance for either you and the partner, who is pulling the puppy on the rope. 

Also, I looked up the verb form of "sire," and all I got was something like "to father," which I have a hard time fitting in the entirety of the poem. 

I also like how you sound like a cute, excited, naive puppy with the pacing. I would also agree to get rid of the commas so that you can better create this sense of excitement with the pace.

Precariously placed

In some chaotic, funny place,

I smile and gush my grace

With no clue what's going on.

Like a puppy with a shoe,

A rope, a stick and you,

I pant and fix my gaze

On oh so many things.

I wonder, can you relate

To this funny fortune-Fate

That excites me while she tires,

Pets me while she sires,

Forever in between

Some nightmare and some dream

So gorgeous, so obscene

stepping forward always, oh!


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