Excellent use of rhyme, it really got me smiling. I got a strong vibe of playfulness from this piece, but there is something a little darker contained within it that I certainly relate to. The only line I felt didn't jive with the rest was the first, although it's possible there's a reference I'm missing there. The word "dungeon" seems a little misplaced, maybe "castle" would flow better due to its consonance with "kick." Overall a strong piece though, good work!

Thanks! The dungeon thing is a reference to World of Warcraft, which I guess could be a bit obscure to people who don't play.

I like the sarcasm in your poem. I got a high-spirited vibe from this until the last line, which made the poem just that little bit darker. The rhyming is great, although like lastlivingkid said you might want to change "dungeon" to "castle".

You hit the nail on the head. It's so difficult to express these things sometimes. But you got it, 100%. Thanks.

I like how this piece shows that in this generation you can simply just delete someone out of your life like you never could before. Social media is really changing the way we live our lives and I'm glad somebody addressed it

This is fantastic. I enjoyed "A friend in need is a friend indeed" just because I can picture Mr.Collins re/ pride and prejudice. I agree with mnfoci about deleting someone out of your life, its heartbreaking in a sense, but also so accurate.



Thanks for your vote to kick me from the dungeon.  
I might never have known how terrible I am.  
  
Thank you for unfollowing me on Twitter.  
And bonus points for dropping my Instagram.  
  
I appreciate your unfriending me on Facebook.  
A friend in need is a friend indeed, they say.  
  
But most of all, thanks for dissing me on Reddit.  
If you think you have friends online, well, forget it.  
  
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