I said cross-eyed that I was freedom incarnate

Bug me about this later, as there's more to say. But to just point out some things that stuck out to me

bananas;

I feel that's a bit too much taking the piss (with bananas at least to me being the quintessential "lolrandom" fruit).

(I have not eaten in a fervent while)

I love "fervent while" as a phrase. Following on "bananas" this is a bit too coherent and cute (as in "lol I blurted out a food cuz I wuz hungry").

acquire position, sing-song, blasting techno-
jargon.

Trying to make something of it but has not made it through yet. I do like "blasting techno-/jargon")

It will be alive on the air waves of this
purposeful-poise that are allowing ourselves to
be consumed by and

I think the purposefully broken grammar and anti-poetic flair is strongest in this clause. In part because this feels like something generated by auto-complete -- where we have something that is trying very hard locally to make sense but on a larger scale failing completely -- whereas much of the rest of it feels too deliberately nonsense to be interesting.

falling, in the knowhow
that you will not be captivated by a mask(s)

I feel like (s) was only appended out of fear of being sincere, which I found offputting.

daunted by them only on Sundays; its one fault
of mine that they stay whole for a weak after,
those lies; I am halfhearted awaiting your bail.

These are really good lines.

I would like to say something globally about this piece but haven't pieced my mind together yet. I'm glad to have it posted here though.

two lines that stood out to me were "i have not eaten in a fervent while" and "i am halfhearted awaiting your bail." i think those two allowed me to get a good feeling of what you were trying to convey. the middle portion, the meat of the piece, that made it a bit more difficult.

it's experimental, certainly. the problem i have when reading off-kilter pieces is that i can't tell what is done on purpose and what is an error. "It will be alive on the air waves of this purposeful-poise that are allowing ourselves to..." was this an error? a missing word, perhaps? or am i misreading it entirely?

i think you've probably got a good grasp of standard poetry and language in general, but remember the reader isn't in your head; with a piece like this, it may require a bit of cleanup so that the reader isn't stumbling along.

I read it once and didn't understand anything and then read it twice and also did not understand anything. it reads a bit like listening to three different radio channels simultaneously. the first and last lines sound like a guy calling from jail. and then position acquired and the word blasting evoke fighter pilot talk for me.