From the perspective of a layman... I think I like the idea slightly better than the execution.  I feel like the descriptions of the words weren't as poignant as the words themselves, and I wanted them to be.  I would also change "Part pure beauty" to just "Part beauty" just to keep structure with the rest of the poem.  Cool idea though... also I don't know anything about poetry, so take my criticism with a grain of salt.

Not really a story. The common thread is the terrible parts of being a living human being. I appreciate the criticism though

Infinity, lividity, beauty, fidelity, contingency, monotony, divinity, humility, anomaly, finality - what's the common thread here?  Further, what's the corrrelation between each word and their following lines?  

The idea of the piece isn't bad, but it falls flat in execution.  If you're telling a story, what are the parts of the story?  

Part infinity,

Your swelling puss bubble of "to just be" about to burst.


Part lividity,

The surface-tension so thick you could cut it with a knife.

Part pure beauty,

The fleeting moments you think you still have dreams.


Part fidelity,

As the blood seeps through the scab that time forgot.


Part contingency, 

With suffering the only thing you'll ever be guaranteed. 

Part monotony,

As you try to fill a grave with shit.


Part divinity, 

The glimmer of something bigger than you that you clasp with your cold, dead hands.


Part humility,

When you know that what you see is definitely what you get.


Part anomally, 

As your aspirations slip right between the lines.


Part finality,

When only your broken feet can feel the crumbling pavement.


Fully human, 

The story you write is never told again.  


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