[Review Video] (Swearing) YouTuber Day in the Life Parody

Self Review: I've recently been making videos satirizing YouTube and internet culture and would really appreciate some feedback. I think the cuts in and out of the music had the intended comedic effect but I need to upgrade my audio and lighting equipment.

Video: https://youtu.be/JPzXfhkvipI

Review 1: https://www.reddit.com/r/youtubers/comments/6iwbaf/review_video_hey_guys_check_out_my_first_video/

Review 2: https://www.reddit.com/r/youtubers/comments/6iohhq/review_video_working_on_the_unboxing_formula/