[Review Video] How to Level Up Your Willpower!

Made this video about self-denial and its influence on willpower and overall well-being. My goal with these videos is to be both entertaining and educational - but above all, I want to help people improve themselves. Self Review: I think I'm naturally competent at being a host. I understand how to make content seem interesting, and I think my delivery is not the problem. I also think that my production value is fairly high - the sound is great, my intro is good, and my lighting is above average (still need to work out some kinks with the strange color). HOWEVER:

I think I need to work on my writing, above everything. Although it is supposed to be educational, I think that often times it can seem like a bit of an information-dump. Perhaps there's a way I can further simplify the research, add a few more jokes, and overall make the video seem just a little more laid back. Any other suggestions? Thanks a lot.

My video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JCeIrMANzS4

Review 1: https://www.reddit.com/r/youtubers/comments/6sqjqs/review_video_tree_review_i_sarcastically_review/dlewcb6/

Review 2: https://www.reddit.com/r/youtubers/comments/6souva/review_video_i_talk_about_the_most_annoying_types/dlewixp/