I'm not sure if it was your intention but I found this kind of funny. Well done. 

Nothin better than having fun with language

I really only aimed to entertain rather than move, but fair, enjoy yourself!

in the penultimate line, should it not have been 'toiled'?

last two lines are me_irl

yolk of my eye, nice simile!

there is not much more that I can say, it is my shortcoming, but your poem describes the daily struggle with internet and smartphones quite aptly! :)

Ehh.  If you reworked this piece as complete flarf, it'd function better.  As-is, it's just a mess of enjambment, bad grammar, odd or lacking punctuation, and metaphors that don't make much sense.

Nonsense  

Perfect nonsense ha!  

White shells on jet symbols of black  

Cognition whirs  

Motors gyrate  

Hello World I!   

Behold bold I!    
&amp;nbsp;

Keys flit to pronounce me 

Spazzled on you   

See my Nonsense!  

In our Glass house  

Peek underneath  

All Eyes Only  

And now again  

I’m spun through sites  

The ether dials   
I don't deny    
&amp;nbsp;

Urgh

Contort for me you whores  

Sss lance taboos 
vault to shut blinds  

Flesh phimosis  

Come  

Breathless awe  

I’ll have myself   
a luxury   
&amp;nbsp;    


Spam Spam!       

ejaculates itself  

Close the windows  

Delete the mind    

Light caskets   

carried in my palm    

Come break the   
yolk of my eye more    

I toll another day again    

Sublime nonsense I tell we all!    

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