Today, I wrote my very first poem!

Feedback Received!

((I sat on this, jittery and nervous, for over an hour before deciding to share. Fair warning: it's pure, unedited stream-of-consciousness, so it's structurally schizophrenic, but that's consistent with my aims! Here goes:))

Ball of yarn, cat-unravel, cradle is grave

Chase the string endless, there is no core

Roll the wheel endless, there are no spokes

Must we imagine Sisyphus happy?

Flows the tide: ever-changing

Sun and moon: there and back again

The stars above: slow slow

Climb a muddy cliff: my hands aren't dirty

Slip!

They're too clean: effete soap bubbles

Solution to all-power: abnegate omnipotence

Solution to no-power: abnegate life

God's death: lapse to pre-cosmogonic chaos

Primed arrow: forth to that chaos

The phoenix is helical: one-way

The phoenix is order: what structure?

Flows the tide: consumes my sand castle

Darn

I liked that sand castle

Oh, well

Bound in my freedom: death is the one true freedom

Paralytic crossroads: paths defy geometry

Sit: build another castle

What a waste

Stand: stomp, stomp, stomp

What a waste

See: no travelers? Just me, then?

Maybe one will come along

On a sickly-green horse? In armor of sun-splendor?

None but these sandy shoes

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Posted Jan 15, 2018, 5:16 PM UTC · edited

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