So, if I’m getting this right, at the end of each line I press enter once and end of the stanza I press enter twice? (latter is from the formatting help from subreddit info section)

I think the formatting thins might even just be a reddit problem. Whenever I upload anything, the lines don't properly get transferred into the original post. I found that just putting an extra empty line where it's supposed to stop usually works.

When i post a poem

It looks like this in the text editor

and it ends up looking good enough

after it's posted 

hope this helped! would love to read it again after it's formatted. :D

Thank you so much! Your response really means a lot! And I will take each one of your words into consideration. Thank you! ❤️

This could use some formatting and punctuation. I really like the direction it's headed, and I you had some very clever rhymes in here that made me stop and think. But in some places i think the rhythm fell apart and i lost immersion. I think there's a lot of potential in this poem it just need to be reformatted and tweaked a little bit to make it easier to read. 

You’re right. This was literally the very first complete draft. I’m working on all the changes recommended my you, and others here. Thank you so much for your response, genuinely!

I love the feel of it, but further formatting is very necessary to make it a very interesting read.

Yes! Very true I need to fix that rhyme. Thank you so much for your response, it’s very much appreciated! ❤️

Formatting, yes, but already great in spoken form. However, I think the end could maybe use some work. Gloried and tried don't rhyme, so "I know I tried" makes conceptual sense but the rhyme is missing. Maybe work something out there? Not exactly sure what, would also not be good to write it for you.

I am lost in an abyss
where success seems amiss
I keep walking, searching
I feel the failure breaching

Home seems to get closer,
in truth, it’s never been farther
No matter how hard I strive,
failure’s the one to thrive

Success is a dreamy notion
failure conquers my emotion
I might as well stop now
that’ll be a win, somehow

Reach the home I gloried?
It hurts to know I can’t
for all it’s worth, I know I tried.

-Hassan Shirazi (2018)

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/7qlx1q/comment/dst51zv?st=JCIVRI55&amp;sh=79d818d8
https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/7qpkuf/comment/dst4ve0?st=JCIVS1GA&amp;sh=07263752

A Dreamy Notion