Thank you. A good friend of mine took her own life last week. I wrote this in honor of her.

This is a very beautiful piece. I’m sorry for your loss if it’s something that you’ve experienced recently, but this is such a beautiful outlook. Thank you for sharing :) 

I like the rhyming very much, and the imagery, but am having trouble detecting the rhythm of a traditional poem. 

Have you ever considered sharing this with friends who are musicians? I hope that is not interpreted as an attack on the poem, but I really do think these would make excellent lyrics.

This is touching. If there's a personal connection to the subject of this poem, I wish you the best. It is very short and simple, but communicates its theme perfectly.

Thank you. You interpreted it well. It was a tragic loss for many people.

This is a great piece. I think the repetition of "Fly high, pretty girl" helps to create a sense of longing. The positive description of the girl's  final surroundings helps to offset the sadness of the people who miss her and are not the same without her. It creates a stark contrast between her situation and that of the people that have been left behind. This is a great elegy.

Fly high, pretty girl
where the sky is always blue.
Soar like eagles on wings of gold
while the angel chorus sings for you.

Find peace at last in a place
where the sun shines everyday.
Where you don’t feel any pain
and where love always finds a way.

Fly high, pretty girl
over oceans gleaming bright,
reflecting back the suns yellow rays,
bathing you in warmth and light.

And as time keeps pressing on,
those you left behind will too
but we’ll never be the same
because we’ll be missing you.


https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/7ttlau/light_heart/

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/7tvkjo/a_little_diddy/

Fly High, Pretty Girl