[2093] You can't clean people
This is the first third of a short story I've written. I've lost all perspective on it, so I'd love to get general impressions, as well as an answer to that perennial question "Would you read on?"
Maybe also if it's too confusing. The somewhat cliche section at the top of page 2 is an attempt to alleviate that. I can't just straight cut it, but I could probably change it to something better. Suggestions welcome.
Posted Feb 10, 2018, 2:09 PM UTC
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