Thanks for the feedback. I used dissipation on purpose, I wanted to emphasize the fading away slowly by making "dissipates" the main word to notice. I do see it still working if I had used fade or fading at instances.

I like it, my only recommendation would be maybe try not to use dissipates/dissipation. Or was that done or purpose? Or was it that you couldn't really think of another word? I usually run into that problem too. Besides that, good job!

For some reason I never notice

Only as it dissipates, do I sway

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Dissipation similar to decay

No rays but the effects remain

Exposure as it dissipates

Engraved half-life unknown

Fallout continuous and cold

Untold

Pain within the chest

Deeper, within the soul

//

Never known never known

Until it dissipates and goes...



https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/7xbtby/distractions/du8f4wr/?context=1

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/7xa1u1/repairs/du8haws?context=2

Half-Life