Appreciate your kind words.  I will consider the comma suggestion.  Thank you for reading.

I like that it was from something you physically experienced rather than just imagined. Perhaps a comma after "the only sounds" is needed. The phrases "river of asphalt" and "upon nature's pillars" were the standout for me. Well done.

Thank you for the kind words.  Thank you for reading.

i enjoy the line with the colors and how you broke it up, well done

I agree.  I probably should have made more of an emphasis on the feeling of being in a fishbowl.  Thank you for reading and the suggestion.  

Hey, u/shy_joe , I liked this poem. I love the colors contrasted with the thick greys. One thing I would be interested in seeing is either a title change or perhaps throwing in something to tie it to a fishbowl. Nothing in the poem really made me think of a fishbowl or that what you were riding through was like a fishbowl.

On one hand, I might have used slightly different punctuation to make things a little clearer at a few points (the end of certain lines, for example), but on the other hand, I also think that where you picked to place line breaks really gives it an uncertain, stop-and-go feeling. It fits the mood of being afraid to hit the glass at any given moment.

I also got a sense of the monotony being the bowl itself? Not sure if that was intended, but still chilling either way.

Good job, Joe.

Context - I was riding my bike in the fog.  It was surreal.  Felt like I was inside of a fishbowl, about to hit the edge of the tank at anytime.

riding this bike  
sailing through the fog  
following the river of asphalt,  
poking out from the blurred  
greens, yellows and reds  
upon nature's pillars  
&amp;nbsp;  

the air is thick  
the colors,  
vivid against the grey  
the only sounds  
mechanical repetition  
echoing away  
&amp;nbsp;  

homeostasis controlled  
fear is gone  
locked in place  
where you belong  
&amp;nbsp;
&amp;nbsp;

[1](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/868ez8/the_fire/)  

[2](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/85kpxv/routineweekend/)  

Fishbowl