I thought last 4 lines were talking of new beginning day after tomorrow, so on same lines I was suggesting to edit earlier lines stating that you want to focus what and how to restart by forgetting about how your story with guy started on ended basically that guy should be "don't care" for your future

The guy didn't and don't want to restart for what ever reason and cause.


As pointed by KurtisGH, last 4 lines make the poem complete.

Just wondering if changing this 4 lines will create any change in impact or interpretation

forget where and when  
was the start  
Focus what and how  
you want to restart

Those last few lines are very strong, really brought the whole poem together. I think changing the word societal to something like interpersonal would better fit with the duality that the middle of the poem has, but that's my PO.

She, life, is for living her,  
not for thinking her,  
you have to forget yourself,  
gliding in personal and   
societal  avenues,   
acting and reacting,  
creating and admiring,     
attracting and rejecting,     
forgetting where and when   
was the start   
and where and when  
it's the end.   
Live it like it's eternal,  
die tomorrow but today   
plan what to do  
the day after tomorrow.  
~~  
~  
https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/86v81f/the_voice/dw831gp/

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/86rmjf/sunset_days_first_ever_poem/dw83udq/




Otherwise it's a burden.