A New Beginning

I think even with the message of there not being words or a language to explain the beauty, you still explained it and painted a beautiful image.I would love for this poem to be longer.

I really enjoyed the rhythm and word play of this piece. Nice job!

I was going to pick a favorite line, but I think I liked almost all of them alike.

The only criticisms I can pull out to consider:

• the "here quietly I sit...silent tone" I wonder if losing the quietly would keep the cadence more.
• the opening line tripped me up, but maybe that's just me...perhaps "I had no words to describe... that frozen, country sunrise..." and onward would keep us in the same pace throughout more easily.

I like your word choice in lines three and four. Transition and shimmering are both very fluid like words, which go well with the use of the word 'smooth', while 'gradation' is a blunt word that goes pretty well with the word 'fiery'. This serves to further improve the contrast in these lines.