I think this poem is a great example of a major shift in tone that is executed well.

Is bear/bare intentional?

'I cannot bear to part with you, but then I bare my chest' 

I really like the feel of this, it's calming  and kind in it's feel, accepting of the self, and by extension the reader.

the slow rythm works well,  but the beginning might be a little bloated (delicious brownies). The ending is really strong, great work!

It's a good gateway to a feeling. :)

If you want to try a rewrite, keep everything from 'Eden is seasonal' and try something more directly related in the first half (i. e. more concise/saying less in one poem) but that's just a suggestion for an excercise, it works as-is for me. :)

Heading to class, but great /impactful piece. I wouldn't suggest a thing. As others said, the turn in tone is gorgeously executed. 

Okay, so I really loved this. At first, when I read it I felt that maybe I understood completely what you meant. I read it at least two more times & I feel the meaning as changed for me. The words “holy pantry” oh my gosh, they sound super sweet to my ears! Sweeter than the brownies. I loved the idea of a cooking chair too. I’m not entirely sure what the meaning of it would be, but the connection to your mother, it makes me feel small, like a child. I enjoyed this very much. What a luxury it is to have three types of heat!

Like others have said, this is good. My main concern is with the first stanza. It feels like it exists just to provide tonal contrast and is intentionally simplistic and mawkish. I guess I'd want it to stand a bit better on its own.

Beautifully written. I believe you have carefully mixed personal and public opinions to bring out your overall theme while being able to connect with the audience using personal references

Paradise must be a kitchen  
with all of the snacks and drinks  
you could want. And the oven  
cooks with three kinds of heat  
so I don’t have to wait as long  
for delicious brownies. I’d be fat  
and super happy about it.  
&amp;nbsp;  
The cooking chair would be so  
comfortable, with the leaf-pattern  
my mother has. I would not stay  
however, because Eden is seasonal,  
&amp;nbsp;  
and Heaven is just some holy pantry  
I put old souls in  
&amp;nbsp;  
that I cannot bare to part with yet.  
&amp;nbsp;  
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Paradise is a Kitchen