My poem (I’m a newbie) — What category of poetry would this fit into? Feedback? Thanks!

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She is fully aware that she is but a vessel of a world in which she cannot see.

It's grasp, too far. It's all encompassing, yet lost in the unbridled chains of existence. The Unknown is amidst her, yet hides.

She's surrounded, knowing her body is the host of a connection. What she longs to understand is imprisoned by her earthly body.

An aching -- it's painfully beautiful. The Unknown within her emerges during simple moments.

It comes in brief breakthroughs, then rapidly dismantles as quickly as it had reached out. One breath in: a glimpse of the Unknown is present; the unshakeable feeling.

One breath out: it's gone.

Such as that fleeting moment when time was but a concept - the Unknown within her hummed a tune to her that she swore she had heard before: The brutal sound of the interstate surrounded her. Frigid air hit her hand that reached out towards the never-ending universe. The streetlights danced above her, luminously greeting her electricity. She was not alone -- in a breath, she was affirmed by what she longed to understand. The brilliance inside of her will only be contained for so long, and only then will she know.

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Posted Apr 17, 2018, 6:20 PM UTC · edited

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