First post, and first time asking for constructive criticism aside from that of my mom who thinks I hung the moon. This is called “stringalong.” Make Swiss cheese out of it. Personally, I dislike “love will not cease..” it doesn’t fit the way I want it to. Thx.
Time will tell and it ticks and it tocks with my heart in the balance I wait on the clock of her mind and her mom and her heart and the rest I know that I’m good babe but am I the best for you forever for me for long for now for never just string me along a little bit longer and make me believe our journey won’t stop and our love will not cease just a little bit longer I’ll wait on the clock because time will tell and it ticks and it tocks but honey just know that I’m walking this talk and the hands on my clock won’t ever stop looking and feeling and longing for yours.
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https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/8epdbw/reasons/?st=JGF69FOE&sh=091c6fbc
Posted Apr 25, 2018, 2:27 PM UTC
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