What do you think of: 

Doing drugs alone together/
seemed to work at first, but then you/
packed yourself into a casket/
leaving me alone alone. 

I like the idea of the poem, but I think in execution it could be a lot more specific. I do like the apathetic sort of burn out to it though, as though the conclusion was foreseen or inevitable. As it is now I think you can just get rid of the first line and find a way to tighten up the third. 

Normally I'd say a poem of this nature should be stretched out, but I don't this could be any less consise without ruining it's heartfelt simplicity. You could always make it a small piece of a longer narrative, with a few similar poems telling the whole story, but it's great as it is.

I really really like this. Its very short and very good. So much so that I wish there were more of it. Do you think if you put in a little more between the first couplet and the last it would serve to make the abrupt "emptiness" of the ending even more effective?

    we tried some things to feel better.  
    doing drugs alone together  
    seemed to work at first, but then you  
    left me alone alone.  



1: https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/8ewslu/my_love_is_the_bog/dxyq5o0/?context=0
2: https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/8ewz6l/liturgy_v20/dxyr0t3/?context=0

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