First poem! Oddly enough, /r/ShowerOrange inspired me

I'm a big poetry fan, but until now have never decided to actually attempt to write any. For whatever reason, I had the inspiration to while eating a shower in the orange. Here it is! Be as harsh as needed, this is a hobby I'd like to take up and anything helps! Even if it has a million flaws, I thoroughly enjoyed writing it.

Orange

 

rough, fragrant flesh

Infinitely fractile, cratered,

pried apart by seeking hands.

aroma bursts from broken skin

the flesh of god erupts into a thousand

fragments, summer memories, seconds lost

 

Proust is elated as i

carve out of nothing

the pieces of time

in which the I

ceases to be, and

begins instead

to melt gently,

softly, into

Everything

 

the reaper swoons at the sight

and carries on

 

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