Driver's Dream [Feedback/critique needed]

Color me asleep at the wheel

and dancing between lanes

to the sound of my

favorite traffic jams

on the black fifteen,

but nothing’s out of place.

I’m a death metal rocket singing and

screaming along with the

the ugly voice of the world.

The desertlings and their tribes

were the first to prophesy

my fire and how loud and violent

it was and withdrew to the quiet

of endless sand and shadows.

Northbound or southbound?

It doesn’t really matter now.

Escape is out of the question

for a slave to absurdity’s whim.

The wind takes my dreams captive

and whips back the door to the valley

and I smile knowing I always looked good

in the shade of perpetual twilight.

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