Love Theme (With music)

This is a poem I wrote to accompany a piece of music I composed. I will leave the link to the music under the poem if you wish to listen to it while you read the poem.

 

Countless stars

just the two of us

beneath them

Stems of grass

just the two of us

among them

Orchid dust

by the wind gets flung

into all

Hair falls down

on the naked skin

covers mine

Countless stars

just one

beneath them

   

Here is a link to the music https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=W4EAEE1UYOw

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