[1259] The Chronicle

Hi all!

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ewrN66yTXxFZjnsDtnIA2fFRa6wHq94IIPkoPk0KCyQ/edit?usp=sharing

As a quick overview, this is a teaser of sorts for a book idea I have. Currently, I'm going to be using it as a teaser for a DND campaign I'm writing, so critiques in that capacity are welcome!

Since this is my first post, I am open to all kinds of feedback. One thing I want to work on though is making it a readable style. This could be what voices and tenses I tend to use, and verbosity.

But have at it! (And let me know if I messed something up in posting/critiquing)

Critiques: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/91eo5a/1047_the_mark_of_a_tyrant/e2xybbv/

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/913toz/1421_resonance_chapter_1/e2w0v0z/

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/90i2jj/2983_the_artificers_chapter_1_v2/e2r39ej/

EDIT: Thanks for the feedback so far! Looks like like the big takeaways for me are:

1. Vagueness - Work on balancing specifics
2. Shifts of perspective - Avoid going from narration to character POVs
3. Adverbs - I use them too much.