The dove

Feedback Received!
Here dove lands  
On broken stone  
With broken wing  
Never alone  

Mending stone  
Mending wing  
No more pain  
No more sting  

Now dove flies  
Never alone  
But here it stays  
The broken stone  

(First poem in a while, would like some advice)

Edit: Saw the rule about feedback, so here are the links.

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/92z0mv/perception/e39zvep?utm_source=reddit-android

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/931gq9/amphibian/e39zs1k?utm_source=reddit-android

Posted Jul 30, 2018, 6:08 AM UTC · edited

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