[959] Two Dead Brothers

Hi, this is my first post here, and I think I am doing this correctly, but please let me know if I am not.

I absolutely love weird and unconventional worlds, and tried my hand at doing something that is borderline non-sensical. My hope is that, while strange, it is still readable and that you can generally follow the story and understand the plot points.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1T1OSUgJ2JqMFh436uK9TePMJ5wxMvaqdNVIDlE_zlGU/edit

Here is my critique, though I wasn't sure if I needed to do another story since there is about a 200 word difference. Please let me know if you would like me to write another critique, and I will definitely do that in the morning.

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/95rtbh/755_they_who_keep_the_sky/e3xkj56

Thank you!

Edit:

Here's another critique, sorry and thanks!

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/95iq4a/471_daydreams_of_august/e3xndt1